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For today's writing task was to write about the picture we got given. My picture was a Mysterious Island that had a big cloud over the top.
Jack ties' boat up to the rocks and begins the climb. Jack sees dark and gloomy caves, he wonders if there is a monster at the top or a castle. Jacks at the top of the cliff and at the beginning of the big walk through the scrub. Jack comes to a Holt " what are these mysterious carvings on the rocks. Jack comes to the the cloud and is amazed of what he saw. A huge nest full of baby griffins that are with there mother. " What is this" he says. " it looks like a humongous lizard heading towards the Griffins". "OH NO !!! I got to go help". Jack grabs his small bag and pulls out a sword. Unicorns come out from a rainbow and take the Griffins to a safe place. Jack stabbed the lizard in the head the lizard lets out a horrible cry. Jack hopped onto a unicorn and ride away. The End
Do you have any feedback for me?
hey celeb great piece of work write here. but maybe next time you could ad in the picture that you are descriptive writing or telling about the
ReplyDeletepicture. but otherwise it is great but maybe next time prof read to make sure it makes sens and the punctuation you might of missed.